Thriller (Relapse)

This is the first draft that was handed in on a deadline of Friday 8th March. I met this deadline successfully, however I have now received a good amount of constructive criticism on how and where I can exactly improve. I achieved a working grade of D+. The picture quality for the first draft also wasn't transferred and exported in HD which explains why the picture seems to be blurry and skip now and then.

The establishing shot needs to be cut as the beginning of the right to left pan jerks about a bit then hits a smooth shot.

Majority of the time that I spent before the first deadline was cutting all of the clips to meet the suspense that is created in our ideas on the storyboard. However the narrative in the draft seems to be too over complicated and can lose the audiences attention if they become confused too easily. This is perfectly fine to correct as the clips just need to be shuffled around and done corresponding to the scenes written on the storyboard. We have good quality shots now they are in HD, they just need to be put together in the right places like pieces in a jigsaw.

The titles were also just a complete first draft. We will use and try various other softwares to get the maximum quality out of the titles edits. Also the effects that are put on the titles aren't timed as well as they could be. A problem consists that they tend to appear on shots and scenes that a colour contrast clashes and makes the titles seems a bit unclear.

We have some raw filmed shots that we still need to put in. For example a close up of the victims hands going on the shoulder of the killer. This shot can be put in slow motion to create intensity.

There is also a vast amount of editing to be done with what effects we use. The straight cuts used to go to different shots are too straight forward and boring, it won't present a variety of skills to anyone watching. Things like the colour contrast need to be looked at aswell if colours are clashing with eachother which seems to be what happens on a couple shots, especially with the sunlight coming down.